Earlier this week we saw as an author had a meltdown and called out two book bloggers for not liking her book. But what makes a review unprofessional?

The following review was posted on Amazon and several are saying it’s unprofessional and even rude.

I’m going to give Jane one more chance after this, but if the third book is this bad I’m done. While the first book was good enough to encourage me to buy number 2, this one was far less engaging. Suspension of disbelief only goes so far. For the series to work it has to have a premise that makes some sense. The biggest issue here is that the main theme doesn’t stand up to scrutiny.

*****SPOILERS******

The very private and powerful Vamps need to hire Jane to neutralize a problem they can’t, even though they hate outsiders being privy to their secrets. This is the foundation that lays the ground work for the rest of the plot. Why bring in some barely tolerated outsider and risk exposing themselves? She must have some skill or ability that they lack, right? Except she doesn’t. Therein lies the problem.

What does Jane bring to the table here that makes her worth letting into the Vamp inner circle? Super scent glands? The Vamps have that. Why couldn’t Leo or one of his Scions walk around town sniffing for Rogue? Super strength? Vamps have that too. Super speed? The Vamps are even faster than Jane. Brains beyond the norm? Er, no. Vamps living for thousands of years really should have gotten some kind of clue by now. Besides, Jane seems to just stumble upon her information most of the time. Her main source is the police file room. Are we expected to believe that the “Master of the City” hasn’t managed to infiltrate the N.O. police department over the last several hundred years? Please. He’d have greased a few palms and had copies of everything in police possession. Adding to this plot inconsistency, there were prior cases exactly like the one Jane is supposed to be solving, with exactly the same perpetrators. The Vamps all know this, yet it never occurs to them to look into it? Instead they hire Jane and refuse to tell her anything about the prior cases? Here’s a more likely scenario for you:

A bunch of witches are being kidnapped and young rogues are popping up inside magic circles.

Leo turns to the Priestess and says, “Hey do you remember back a few hundred years when the Rousseaus were doing the exact same thing as this?”

Priestess: “Yeah, I stopped them once with this here burning cross. They have some long-chained kids locked in the basement that they’ve wanted to free of the madness since they lived in Haiti. And they originally experimented on young witches in order to cure that using magic circles just like these”

Leo: “It might be smart to check them out, since I myself punished them for doing this very same thing before. Let’s go pay the Rousseaus a visit and use our super scent power to smell them for witch blood.”

Case solved. Story over.

Frankly, if this is how poorly Leo manages his little empire he probably deserves to be overthrown by someone smarter and more capable.

On a more minor note: The romance side of this book was totally mangled. After two books of hinting at romantic feelings between Jane and Rick and Jane and Bruiser, the big climax wrapped up in one measly paragraph and consisted of… “and I woke up feeling great on his side of the bed???” Note to Author: Don’t introduce a romantic element if you can’t follow through on it. The whole “romantic tension” thing was really poorly done anyway and seemed thrown in as an aside. At this rate, the story would have been better off without it at all.

Oh, and one last thing. As a mother, I can tell you that the last place on the planet I would be with my too cute little witch children would be in the house of someone deeply involved with hunting people who were KILLING WITCH CHILDREN!!!

——This is what @Book_Feary had to say about it:

Sounds like they have a personal vendetta against the book. Wasn’t professional. Erring on the ruder side

Besides @Book_Feary, others have spoken out against this review. I didn’t think anything about it when I read it.

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